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And I knew you'd be your own destroyer.
Your life was wasted like a running river,
flowing deep, passing me.
I never thought you'd make it,
As I carry whats left of you home again,
The river flows on.

Winter creeps behind us,
and I long to hold your hand again.
To see your skin come alive with my touch,
Like it used to.
But now what's left of your loving heart,
and shreds of forearms,
so limp and cold.

Destination: the river,
where we swore so many things,
in our iron-shod paradise.
The words in their thousands,
Passed through those bars.
As I sat high and you sat low.

Laughter echoed through the iron.
Cries died down into the silt.
The river saw its share of us too,
splashing happily.

Now its still,
now its cold,
like you've become.

It only seemed fair,
To bring you back to where you were happy once.
Or were you really happy with me?
Or was it all a facade?
i dont want to know,
and I never will.
:iconcaptainozz:
I wrote this after listening to "St Lawrence river" by David Usher
(if you've never heard of him you NEED him the most amazing canadian singer/songwriter EVER!)

Its a litle well grim really but I enjoyed writing it!
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~l0stwhispers Dec 12, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
That's so touching... I love this. No rhyme, but it's perfectly alright. You made it flow real well. =) Great piece!
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~Sylvanashala Sep 6, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
another piece to add to my collection..... :) I really really enjoyed reading this piece. Just immersing myself into it letting my spirit float upon your words.


I just may have to find out more about your inspiration for this piece.....

:hug:
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:iconcaptainozz:
ah! it was an old favourite place of mine... somewhat of a hide-a-way i'll get some pictures and send them to you... the place itsself is on the river ouse between york and selby at my little village called Bishopthorpe!

But i suspect there will be pictures of the place online somewhere...
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~Sylvanashala Sep 7, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
i'd love to see it!
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:iconandyridae:
depressing, typical ben. :) good one though.
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:iconcaptainozz:
Hehe you know me too well!
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:iconandyridae:
it seems like it :)
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:iconnevergetfooledagain:
~nevergetfooledagain Sep 6, 2005  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's beautiful, Ozz...one of the best you've ever written! Way to go, love...:cuddle:
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:iconcaptainozz:
aww thanks hun! oddly enough i like it too...
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~Mysterria Sep 5, 2005   Writer
There are several precious things I can take with me from reading this. Thank you! :hug:
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