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Give me a song, worth singing from the heights of a clifftop,
over to calm the raging seas,
a pinnacle point, to quash the rage of the oceans.
Come to my side, in the pouring rain and howling wind.
Let the squall lash your dark hair across your pale face,
turn your seagreen eyes unto mine night sky blue's.

Here layeth the raging storms of torrential emotion,
which poured forth from a broken, bruiséd and shattered heart.
Here you sung to the storms, though they railed against you,
your steady, confident gentleness soothed the wrath away.

Now together, within my walls we sit and confide in each other,
share long passed secrets and long lost stories.
Between the walls, you and I, we grew to love, in secret,
though quiet, our love grew warmer day to day.
Turning to replace the storms of fear, to storms of passion.

And the vessels of our hearts deftly skim the waves of our love,
no serpents from the deep snap at the keels anymore,
as together we conquered them.

On days of calm we sit among the shingle beaches,
to watch the warming sunset on our heart-boats.
Your hand in mine, like crossed oars, a fishing-village marriage,
no one can help but smile at us, even the wizened old skippers,
they say our love is a beacon brighter than the lighthouse.

I heard folk tales of you and I,
from the days when I used to read to the seas,
to calm them for the fishermen.
They said the seas listened to me,
the fabled merfolk too.

A long time passed since you were a dancer,
on the breakers my love,
you were taken by the sea with a wrong step,
but the sea gave you back,
gave you to me.

You heard me reading, they say,
and remembered who you are,
and remembered your heart,
and remembered you love.

As we sit here now, the clifftop, our pinnacle adored,
I smile to you and silently thank the seas,
for bringing you back to me.
More seafaring poetry.
The epilogue to this piece.

Edit:
I'm speechless! Thankyou so much *Deadrosebud!
Thank you all for the favs and comments.
Wow, I'm literally speechless!
Thanks also to ^LadyLincoln.
Just, dunno quite what to say yet.
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Given 2008-07-06
Heart-boats by =SorrowBurn, is an interesting blend of romance, imaginative mystique and also includes the magical pull of the element of the sea. ( Suggested by Orestiad and Featured by LadyLincoln )
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delicouslavethe8 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2009
of all the things ive been fortunite to have witnessed you write this this right here made me jump even farther then the others to get to the next line absolutly timeless homie this is one of those writes that make you immortal

Now together, within my walls we sit and confide in each other,
share long passed secrets and long lost stories.
Between the walls, you and I, we grew to love, in secret,
though quiet, our love grew warmer day to day.
Turning to replace the storms of fear, to storms of passion

this is the part that made me go "damn thats deep" lool (in a sorta sense it reminded me of that scene in v for vendetta when v puts evee in the jail situation)

i heard a wise man say you could never understand someone unless youve been through the same kinda pain
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luciferismyhomeboy Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009   Writer
I wish i could write poetry like this :)
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
Keep trying, is all I can tell you.
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luciferismyhomeboy Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009   Writer
lol, i don't have the patience I just write down my feelings about a situation and call it poetry. It's so plebeian :)
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murdersdawn Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
ah this enchanted me utterly. it reminds me of a place <3
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2008
Was written with a place in mind, where'd it find you longing for?
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murdersdawn Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
The beautiful Isle of Man, my favourite place in the world.

What place was it written for?
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008
The east coast of Yorkshire (my home) and the southwest coast of Dorset.
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theelfhybrid Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
You should read Terje Vigen.
This was very well written.
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BrigetteMora Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2008  Hobbyist Filmographer
It's beautiful, makes me miss my ocean even more. Well done.
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Xerces Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2008  Professional Artisan Crafter
lovely work! congrats on the DD :-)
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Offended-By-Light Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful as always. And congratulations on the DD! :heart:
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VenomousKisses Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2008
I got the shivers from reading this ...

It is very beautiful.
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sickparody Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2008
This is the most beautiful piece of writing I've had the pleasure of reading in a very long time. :] Thank you.
When I started reading, I was, admittedly, a bit lethargic. The part that absolutely floored me to begin with was

'Here you sung to the storms, though they railed against you,
your steady, confident gentleness soothed the wrath away.'


My eyes watered and, truthfully, I don't remember the last time a poem brought tears to my eyes. Amazing.
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2008
Thank you for the compliments and tears, I suppose.
Glad you could take something from my work.
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Underwatercemetary Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
Fav or die.
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koffeeben Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats, my dear.
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Aranov Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008  Professional Artisan Crafter
Gorgeous imagery. I love this.
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
Thankyou.
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yourmyinspiration Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
It is beautiful.
Well done.
I love it.
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
Thankyou.
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yourmyinspiration Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
Your welcome.
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bRoKeNgRiN Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow wow. Quite a piece of poetry we have here. The imagery was absolutely riveting and the words were deep. I really loved your flow within the poem too, it was smooth and went well. It's nice to see something that is a bit more lovely in terms of atmosphere and language when the pages around here are strewn with depressing stuff. I couldn't get to it until after I finished my presentation, but it was a wait that ended well. I'm glad I got to read this and I hope that you continue to spit forth your poetry. Ciao. :)
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
"Spit forth" I shall.
Odd adjective!
Thankyou, none the less.
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killer-synth Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
I'm kind of speechless.
This was so beautiful and many other adjectives that aren't coming to mind right now.
I am sure you're overloaded with comments now, but i thought I'd let you know, this made my week.
:)
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
I've committed myself to answering those comments that deserve answering.
Like yours, even simply with "Thankyou."
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koriin Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
^O^ this piece is so inspiring!!!
mooore! moooore!!
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:iconcaptainozz:
CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
There's plenty more in my gallery, if you care to look?
Thankyou.
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koriin Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
ooooh, i shall go look right now... ^_^
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Brutal-Poodle Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008  Professional General Artist
pure poetry
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SakuraSorceress Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
:favelove:
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ahollowvoice Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
Brilliant, always a pleasure to read your pen's bleeding brother. Always.
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Sandart2008 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
Wow, very interesting poem. It captures romance so intensely. :)

I really like it. Fave. :hug:
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
Thankyou for your kind words.
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Sandart2008 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
You're welcome! :hug:
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rottenpeeches Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
Very beautiful and soft. I'm very impressed :aww:
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
Thankyou kindly.
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ravenclawxwhitewolf Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008   Writer
:faint: This is just...just beautiful. It's poignant and nostalgic, and I love it. :hug: :+favlove:
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
"Nostalgic?" I'm not sure how you mean...
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ravenclawxwhitewolf Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
To me, this just seems like it was a carefree time, in which anything could happen. Nostalgia means "a sentimental yearning for the happiness of a former place or time", according to Dictionary(dot)com....It just fits, I think. c:
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008
Huh, if you think it fits, your interpretation is as good as anyone elses.
Thankyou. (:
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UKNoWuLuVME1993 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
wow this is a rlly nice poem
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BlindNinjaGirl Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008   Writer
I'm so glad I read this. It is absolutely beautiful. I read it aloud to myself quietly because that is the best way to read something and my voice broke on the last sentence. I had such a wonderful, cute image in my head and your words are just...amazing! Congratulations on the daily dev! You so totally deserve it!
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
Thankyou, I'm still rather astounded.
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TheCoriful Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
Beautiful... and I can imagine everything so well!
This should be... weekly deviation, for all I care :XD:
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
Haha, thankyou for the kindness and honesty, imagery always plays a large part in my work.
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TheCoriful Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
you're very welcome!
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Guitarguy42 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008  Student Artisan Crafter
btw great poem. the imagery of the violent thrashing sea creates a great contrast to the love and gentlesness of the poem, without being too diabetes inducing. a good read
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CaptainOzz Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008
Thankyou for your... Interesting diagnosis! :lol:
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FragileReveries Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
Beautiful...
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